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GENERAL => Spam => Topic started by: Darkyellowz on July 11, 2011, 03:31:51 AM

Title: random thing i thought up.
Post by: Darkyellowz on July 11, 2011, 03:31:51 AM
"I changed for you, yet you don't see me, as i blend in, i think of you, why must you ignore me...?"

Yes, i'm making a love thing, for a story, can you guys tell me if its good or not?
Title: Re: random thing i thought up.
Post by: Tanassy on July 11, 2011, 03:34:26 AM
Quote from: Darkyellowz on July 11, 2011, 03:31:51 AM
"I changed for you, yet you don't see me, as i blend in, i think of you, why must you ignore me...?"

Yes, i'm making a love thing, for a story, can you guys tell me if its good or not?
Wow that's alot of commas. Otherwise it's a good start.