some of my poetry.

[mascaraa.]

I've lately been writting a lot. I'm kinda stuck though, I don't know if it's any good. I would like some feedback.
Here are some of my favourites:

years, months, days,
times slips away,
hours, minutes, seconds,
you barely see it passing by,
wishing in this moment,
time will stop, won't fade away,
help me feel alive, make me believe,
all that's left is you and me.

and here's one more for now.

You gently pull our lips apart,
And as you gaze into my eyes you slowly whisper "I love you."
The sound of your voice sends chills down my spine,
And I yearn for your lips, your hands, your body,
Crashing down on mine,
I can still feel the electricity from your touch,
The burning sensation from your gaze,
And as our fingers intertwine,
I can hear our hearts collide.

Okay, well keep in mind I'm not great in english, I actually almost failed, but yeaaah. Tell me what you think. (: