random thing i thought up.

Started by Darkyellowz, Jul 11, 2011 03:31 AM

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Darkyellowz

Jul 11, 2011 03:31 AM
"I changed for you, yet you don't see me, as i blend in, i think of you, why must you ignore me...?"

Yes, i'm making a love thing, for a story, can you guys tell me if its good or not?

Tanassy

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Jul 11, 2011 03:34 AM
Quote from: Darkyellowz on Jul 11, 2011 03:31 AM
"I changed for you, yet you don't see me, as i blend in, i think of you, why must you ignore me...?"

Yes, i'm making a love thing, for a story, can you guys tell me if its good or not?
Wow that's alot of commas. Otherwise it's a good start.
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